Focusing on What Matters

An Important Skill to Hone


I'm working on a new short story titled "Brent Wood Saves the World One Idiot at a Time," but I'm having a really hard time with a long, dense, veiny descriptive scene.

My MC is eating oatmeal before heading out to bang his best friend's mom. But that last part is not especially important to the story line, so I'm focusing on the part that is:
How should I describe the bowl and utensils, and what type of oatmeal is it?
Also, I need answers before 9:20 a.m. tomorrow (second period).

Thanks in advance.
Picture of a beefy guy with his shirt off and holding a bowl of oatmeal, which he is handing toward the viewer with a spoonful above it.

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